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Battle of Cartagena de Indias

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Coordinator note, this review was initiated by Tttom (talk · contribs) at 22:50 UTC on 16 August 2010. -MBK004 00:33, 17 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

AustralianRupert

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  • in the References, Citation # 41 has a bare url which should be formatted so that the chain is not visiable (you've done this with the others);
  • in the Bibliography section, the works without ISBNs should have OCLC numbers. These can be found at [1];
    • I haven't seen these used in articles on WP. Browsing the last few FAs today, not one show an OCLC number.
  • in the Bibliography section, the link to "Tobias Smollett" shouldn't be in brackets, it should just be piped as you've done with Fernandez;
    • Done.
  • according to the Featured article tools one of your external links is broken: [2];
    • Done.
  • Alt text could be added to the images per WP:ALT;
  • the Advisor script reports that the ISBN for "Harbon, John D..Trafalgar and the Spanish navy, Conway Maritime Press, 2004, ISBN 08700216953, pp.108 - 113." in Citation # 49 might not be correct, can you please investigate? AustralianRupert (talk) 04:01, 25 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    • Done.

XavierGreen

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Woody

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It is looking good, much better than the previous incarnations of the article.

  • The lead is too small for the size of the article. I would suggest a couple of good-sized paragraphs.
  • "Blas de Lezo, a Basque, was an experienced, wily and tenacious Spanish Naval commander, whose previous career was as daring and spectacular as any naval officer of his day." This is all a bit POV and unsupported by sources. Any source for this, is it a quote
      • Sources given at end of paragraph: Rodgers and Harbon.
  • Which language version are we going for? Manoeuvre would seem correct to me? Same with harbor-->harbour etc
    • I use American English spelling, I believe either is correct, but use should be one or the other. In this case, as the primary editor, it should follow American spelling - I suppose.Tttom1 (talk) 05:10, 25 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The expedition was very slow getting started from England. Initially, contrary winds delayed the sailing until most of the shipboard provisions were consumed and a steep increase of sickness[50] occurred among the ship crews, then news of the sailing of the French squadrons and a Spanish squadron caused further delay while the British fleet was reinforced in response." This is too long, can we split it in two?
    • Done.
  • It might benefit from a slight copyedit, quite a few sentences don't seem to run well to me.
  • Overall though, this is a good article that deals with the issues neutrally. Good work, Woody (talk) 11:34, 25 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Any reason why there's a picture of Philip V from 1700 in this article? Herodotus1960 (talk) 14:32, 25 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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